Author's Note:
Something else that could've happened instead of what really did happen.
"Now, ain't you ashamed of
yourself?" she said.
"Not at all," the boy replied.
"I do what I want to and I'm proud of what I do."
She snarled. She whacked him with her
pocketbook and kept walking. He caught up to her, though, and tried to steal it
again. This time, she whacked him so hard that he lost his balance and fell
backwards. The wind got knocked out of him so he just lay there. The woman went
home, and started to cook dinner. The boy followed her home and took a dollar.
The next day, he came back, and took another dollar. After 10 days, he had just
what he needed to buy those shoes that he wanted. Blue suede shoes.. That's all
he could think about while walking happily to the store. Little did he know,
that the woman had known. He got sent to jail, and he never stole again.
I thought your word choice was good and I couldn't find anything to work on. I think you did very well with this piece overall.
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